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Post by Administrator on Sept 23, 2007 21:11:34 GMT -5
Mostly all right- however, the history doesn't match up with Selenitas history.
There have been only three Weyrs for a long time, and none of them have died out from a plague. Can you fix that so it matches up with our timeline? Thanks!
And by the way, please don't put them in the sub-boards to start out. I'll move her back once she's been approved. ^^
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Post by Administrator on Sept 23, 2007 21:40:42 GMT -5
I think I'm gonna need to ask you to change his name. >< Sorry! There's already a candidate here named Taren, and and he was kinda here first. xD
Also, bronzeriders tend to possess more leadership qualities, and he doesn't seem to have that type of stuff in him. I'm sure you could edit it, though! ; D
In his history, I'll need you to add some more info about wherever he came from. Since the only other Weyrs are Benden and Fort, and both are very militaristical, how did he deal with the battles and such? If you make him Selenitas-born, though, it'll be easier, but you'd have to space out the Hatchings more in your history.
Last, but not least, the dragon's personality. Having him be exactly like the rider just doesn't cut it. Take the time to flesh it out, please! ^^;; Thankssss!
And BTWs, if you're only making him for the Flight, I think I'd recommend not making him at all. Charries need substance to survive here, and a single ambition just won't cut it. I won't allow bronzerider abandonment simply because he doesn't win a Flight. Not to mention I'd reject the bronzerider for the reasoning behind his creation.
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Post by Administrator on Sept 16, 2007 10:45:53 GMT -5
APPROVED
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Post by Administrator on Sept 14, 2007 18:10:02 GMT -5
Once again (I'm asking like everyone here), is this green from the clutch that Aslath hatched from? The age matches it...
Also, there are quite a few hefty run-ons. Mind fixing them? <3
Once that's fixed, I can approve her.
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Post by Administrator on Mar 22, 2007 11:11:43 GMT -5
Oooh Phenylalanth's name reminds me of that ingredient in sodas... phenylalanine I think it's called... xD
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Post by Administrator on Sept 17, 2007 17:53:16 GMT -5
Whoa, I totally didn't catch this the first time around. xD
Dragons don't drink. Fix please! <3
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Post by Administrator on Sept 15, 2007 15:31:41 GMT -5
Use spell check and you're set!
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Post by Administrator on Sept 19, 2007 21:17:11 GMT -5
I know the feeling! xD
It'll do now. xD
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Post by Administrator on Mar 20, 2007 20:12:55 GMT -5
Just a quick question- is it Xainra or Xaina? In you title and pronounciation, it's Xainra, but for the whole application, it is Xaina.
Apart from that, it's great. :'D
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Post by Administrator on Oct 22, 2007 14:36:11 GMT -5
APPROVED
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Post by Administrator on Apr 7, 2007 17:39:28 GMT -5
Fabulous!
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Post by Administrator on Apr 6, 2007 20:29:38 GMT -5
There's no gurantee she'll Impress gold. Also, I'd like there to be a sheet on the flitter, too. Thanks!
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Post by Administrator on Dec 8, 2007 14:30:14 GMT -5
Selenitas Weyr GoldBronzeKing, owner Kaius Shells, owner Piden Queen, owner Syrene BrownAlph, owner N'rik Dash, owner Kaegan Gneiss, owner Qaena Monster, owner Vivano BlueDevotion, owner M'ta Mhir, owner S'rei Nuisance, owner E'rro Rook, owner Tekivix GreenApima, owner T'vis Mouse, owner K'ian Peccadillo, owner Mi'rah Svelte, owner T'san Tiida, owner Roivao Titania, owner A'emi Red, owner Piden Three, owner Piden WhitePisero, owner R'vor For those labeled "Hatchling," participation in Flights is not allowed until one RL month after the ending of the hatching.Updated By Ember 5-6-12Only shows active characters
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Post by Administrator on Sept 4, 2007 7:31:45 GMT -5
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Post by Administrator on Sept 2, 2007 7:41:44 GMT -5
Selenitas Dragons GoldsMillieth, rider Kaegan BronzesKallandrith, rider C'loy Kierjaarth, rider Mi'rah Mavenath, rider Cr'oph Romeoth, rider K'ian Salenth, rider S'rei BrownsBehruth, rider M'ta Chaoth, rider Merridan Dsoleth, rider T'san Ismaroth, rider E'rro Tirneth, rider I'nos BluesChakraith (f), rider Dy'shi Detrith, rider T'vis Eldath, rider Saphor Ioth, rider Iskierka Nevarath, rider Olivia Ophiuchusth, rider N'rik Piwoth, rider R'vor Saphireth, rider Tera Venideth, rider Lilu Craivaruth, rider J'ash Arhenaiyth, rider T'ri Wridelth, rider Syrene GreensAmalath, rider Ruliana Balath, rider K'fuzzi Khiraeth, rider Qaena Kyrahth, rider A'emi Nogoth, rider Eselda Onyth, rider Elysia Quixoth, rider Raebeli Uminth, rider Kalina Updated By Rei 6-23-12Only shows active characters
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